2011年5月25日 星期三
Expressing an Opinion - 1 ( Should the death penalty be banned as a form of punishment? )
In my opinion, the death penalty should not be banned as a form of criminal punishment. First of all, the death penalty gives closure to the family members of crime victims. Some victim's families may spend years or even decades to recover from the sorrow. Some may never recover. Only a death sentence brings finality to those family members. In addition, it creates another form of crime deterrent. Crime would run rampantly if there isn’t some way to deter people from committing the acts. Prison time is an effective deterrent, but to some people, more is needed. We should have a variety of punishments in order to minimize crime. Finally, it contributes to the problem of overpopulation in the prisons. Prisons over the world all face the problem of too many prisoners, which results in having insufficient space and resources. Each prisoner requires a part of a prison cell, food, clothing, and so on. When you do away with the death penalty, it means that prisoners must be in prison for life. Thus, it only worsens the problem of an overcrowded in the prisons. It is for all these reasons and more that I believe the death penalty should be used as a form of criminal punishment.
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Some victim's families
回覆刪除>> Some victims' families
Only a death sentence brings finality to those family members.
這句的意思怪怪的
尤其是F開頭那個單字放在這裡@@
Crime would run rampantly
>> Crimes will run rampantly
acts >>action
Prison time is an effective deterrent, but to some people, more is needed.
這句話的語意耶怪怪的xd
但對更多人 更多是需要的@@?
最後一個論點也太殘忍了吧=口=
因為太多犯人了所以殺一殺
最毒靜苡心....XD
我喜歡你善用的片語唷!!
值得學習~
還滿流暢的 而且每個論點都有詳細的解釋
回覆刪除Prisons over the world all face the problem of too many prisoners.... 犯罪率驚人!?
Some victim's families may spend years or even decades to recover from the sorrow.
回覆刪除>>>
spend ~ + V-ing
spend ~ recovering from ~
:>
寫的很漂亮喔 :>
In my opinion, the death penalty should not be banned as a form of criminal punishment. 這句意思怪怪的~依我的看法,死刑不應該以犯罪處罰的形式被禁止??
回覆刪除後面那個as那裡有點贅字喔~因為死刑本來就是一種處罰方式了,所以可以不用再說出來。
but to some people, more is needed.這句意思怪怪的呢
可以再講清楚是指什麼喔~
Prisons over the world all face the problem of too many prisoners.我覺得把all放在the world前面應該會比較順^^
it only worsens the problem of an overcrowded in the prisons. overcrowded不是名詞喔
所以an後面不能接這個~
然後論點跟論點之間寫得滿順的喔^__^
開頭可多加一個句子~
回覆刪除再接現在這個句子~
會讓文章更漂亮喔=)
people from committing the acts.
這裡的acts可用action代替喔!!!
補充的部分很充實!!!
錯誤也很少~
很棒喔~
if there isn’t some way to deter people from committing the acts.
回覆刪除--> if there aren’t some ways to deter people from committing the crimes.(感覺用crimes比較好)
Some victim's families may spend years or even decades to recover from the sorrow.
-->Some victim's families may spend years or even decades recovering from the sorrow.
用了好多艱深的字但又很流暢~很厲害唷~
In my opinion, the death penalty should not be banned as a form of criminal punishment.(開頭前面可以再加一個社會現況之類的會更充實喔)
回覆刪除Prisons over the world all face the problem of too many prisoners(可以改成Prisoners all over the~感覺這樣會更順喔^口^
寫的很順喔~
wonderful!!(學小敘XD)
the death penalty should not be banned
回覆刪除// 強烈建議把 banned 改成 abolished
but to some people, more is needed.
後面不太懂
怎麼覺得後面好像在探討受刑人過剩的問題阿XD