I am a warm-hearted, optimistic and outgoing girl. I always teach my classmates Math or English problems; in addition, when facing difficulty, I tend to look on the bright side and try to deal with them. Wherever and whenever you see me, I always smile; therefore, I have a good interpersonal relationship at school. Even though there is a big challenge for me or there are a lot of things to do, I finish all of them in a pleasant mood and seldom complain. Imperceptibly, “Take things as they come.” has become my motto; I hope that I can keep holding such a healthy attitude toward each challenge.
Besides schoolwork, I also participate in many activities or learn something that interests me. For example, I am interested in playing badminton because my father masters in it, so I joined the badminton club in the first year from my high school. There, I not only learned the rules which I didn’t know before but made a lot of friends. Apart from badminton, I also started learning to play volleyball. At first, I did not have any interest in it, but I gradually found that it is interesting. I like the atmosphere when playing volleyball with the classmates and it also has become one of the essential parts in my high school life.
when facing difficulty,-->when facing difficulties, (後面寫them)
回覆刪除master:Vt
my father masters in it,-->my father masters it,
I not only learned the rules which I didn’t know before but made a lot of friends.
--> I not only learned the rules which I hadn't known before but made a lot of friends.
“Take things as they come.” has become my motto;有寫到這個感覺還不錯!! 有堅持某種信念的感覺~
第二段除了寫你的興趣以外 也可以提到你從這些活動中學到什麼(努力不懈的精神...之類的) 這會使你的文章變的更好:))
回覆刪除第一行 應該是解決問題 而不是教問題吧 是不是突然想成中文了
回覆刪除difficulty 用複數比較好噢
Imperceptibly 放這裡我覺得怪怪的 不知道對不對
最後 寫了 興趣我覺得很好欸 不過要小心別跟前面的自傳敘述重複了:D
I always teach my classmates Math or English problems
回覆刪除這句後面可以加上從中學習的甚麼~
像是從新複習了一次題目或是體驗到幫助別人等...
第二段寫的很好~~
讓我覺得妳是個文武雙全的女孩~
能在繁忙的課業外運動=)))
不過...
其他也可以加上一些較靜態的活動~~
例如英文課外學習XDDD