2011年9月21日 星期三

School Life

I am studying at Department of Applied Foreign Languages in National Tainan Commercial Vocational Senior High School. All of my classmates are nice and interesting. We study together and experience many activities and competitions. I really love them and my high school life.
I have served as the class treasure, the hygiene leader, discipline leader and the PE class leader. For me, the most toilful cadre member was the hygiene leader. Some of my classmates were often late for school, so they couldn’t finish their cleaning work. I was always the first person that got to the cleaning place and the last one that left the cleaning place. But I thought it is my duty and I was still grateful that all of them were willing to cooperate with me. At the end of that semester, I received a lot of thank-you cards from my classmates. They all wrote that I was very responsible and thanked for my effort. I was also one of the best cadre members. I was not sure that I really deserved so much praise, but I was very happy for both being this cadre member and for those compliments.
Although majoring in English, my English was not very good at first, I believe that the harder I study, the better I would be. By working hard, my English capability has improved a lot and also passed the elementary level of the General English Proficiency Test. After that, I took the intermediate level of GEPT. I passed the listening and reading tests, but I didn’t pass the oral test. I knew my English ability still left something to be desired. Eventually, in this November, I will take the oral test again and I think I will pass it if I keep practicing my English skills.

4 則留言:

  1. For me, the most toilful cadre member
    -->For me, the most toilful cadre position

    打掃那段我覺得中間可以接一段說:即使這樣我還是很進責的幫他們掃地,而他們也會盡快完成工作
    因為前面說他們遲到後面又說謝謝他們的配合會有點突兀

    I was not sure that I really deserved so much praise,
    -->I was not sure if I really deserved so much praise,

    both being this cadre member and for those compliments.
    -->and的左右詞性要相同唷 再改一下吧

    Although majoring in English, my English was not very good at first, I believe that the harder I study, the better I would be.
    -->主詞不同不能用分詞構句~
    , I believe that the harder I study, the better I would be.
    -->,後要再接一個連接詞唷(but) 然後would-->will

    最後一段口過的後面可以寫 雖然沒過但你做了什麼準備所以相信接下來會過 讓評審看到你很認真作努力的感覺

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  2. 前面衛生的部分有點突兀~
    可改成剛上任時有許多人遲到...
    但因為你每次都留下來替他們掃~
    所以後來他們都漸漸的配合你~

    I was also one of the best cadre members.
    突然接這句怪怪的~
    They all wrote that I was very responsible and thanked for my effort. Besides, they said that I was also one of the best cadre members.
    這樣比較好=)

    可加一些社團和參與活動的部分=)
    讓評審知道妳能文能武XDDD

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  3. 第三段I believe that the harder I study, the better I would be 是I will be 吧
    是說第二段一開始就突然跳到被選為幹部 跟第一段接不太起來 中間可以寫些別的東西來銜接會比較好
    what's more 如果可以多寫一些課業以外的事 這篇文章讀起來才會比較平衡 不會說全部偏重在課業上
    再修改一下會更好^^

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  4. 衛生的部分還不錯阿 不過其餘的也可以多加陳述
    英文的部分 似乎太簡略 多寫內容吧
    你也可以把你最愛的排球寫上去阿
    社團也不錯 和同學的互動也行 .......好多

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