2011年6月9日 星期四
Discussing Effects - 1 (Caffeine)
Drinking a moderate of caffeine probably won’t cause you any harm. But drinking too much can have negative effects on your health. Heavy caffeine use is more than 500 to 600 mg a day (four to seven of coffee). Here are some of the effects of too much caffeine. First of all, you will feel nervous, confused and anxious and even have headaches. What’s worse, you may suffer from insomnia, finding yourself difficult to fall asleep. In addition, too much caffeine will not only bring about an increased urination, but cause you to feel nausea and suffer from diarrhea. Last but not the least, heavy caffeine use will result in muscle twitching, difficulty breathing, and fast or irregular heartbeat. What's more, it is even possible to let you die. To sum up, it is good to drink a moderate of caffeine, but it may take your life if you drink too much caffeine.
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1st Drinking a moderate of caffeine
回覆刪除咖啡因不能用喝的吧 可以用"攝取"相關的字
take不知道行不行:>
2nd Heavy caffeine use is more than 500 to 600 mg a day (four to seven of coffee).
使用過多的咖啡因? 同1喽 攝取 攝取量 ...
four cups to seven cups of coffee
很多咖啡因造成的相關名詞呢 其實可以稍加註解不然讀者可能會對某些疾病有疑問x)
Drinking a moderate of caffeine probably won’t cause you any harm這句話我覺得太篤定了~不太適合當開頭句~而且就算一杯也可能會有小影響~
回覆刪除恩~很OK的一篇只是我覺得你可以寫的更好~
結尾的部分稍嫌弱~
我覺得你可以寫的更好耶~有點小可惜~
因為感覺整篇文章比較平鋪直述~
如果可以再多加一些小DETAIL會更好=)))
four to seven of coffee
回覆刪除這裡可以加cup~補充文義=)
Here are some of the effects of too much caffeine.
可改成Here are some of the effects by having too much caffeine.
if you drink too much caffeine
這邊用drink怪怪的!!!
十分通順但是文章不夠豐富~
可以嘗試多加補充或是多列幾點=)
第一行Drinking a moderate of caffeine
回覆刪除咖啡因用喝的??? 改成攝取比較好吧
有些地方 像是you will feel nervous, confused and anxious and even have headaches. 後面可以寫這會有什麼影響 這樣文章看起來會更完整
在各個論點後方可以加你的支持句喔
回覆刪除因為論點不夠有力~
文章有順序但是可以加多一點論點:)
回覆刪除Drinking a moderate of caffeine
回覆刪除moderate當名詞是溫和主義者, 穩健派唷~
But drinking too much can have negative effects on your health.
-->But drinking too much can lead to negative effects on your health. 我覺得用have不太順
let you die-->make you die
恩~蠻順的
大家這篇寫得都差不多~感覺上看了好多偏相同的..(鬼打牆)
Drinking a moderate of caffeine
回覆刪除>> Drinking moderate coffee
是喝咖啡不是喝咖啡因吧~~~怎大家都這樣打=口=
Here are some of the effects
>> Here are some effects
it is good to drink a moderate of caffeine,
這句也跟上面說的一樣~~~
我發覺你會很喜歡亂加of唷@@'