2011年4月6日 星期三
Describing A Process - (4) How To Plan A Trip
Planning a trip can be easy. First, you need to decide where to travel. You can research it online and discuss it with your fellow travelers. Then, you need to keep in mind weather and climatic conditions, merits and demerits of the place, types of recreation, etc. After that you can make a list. Write down the places you want to visit, including restaurants, museums, malls, and other places where you are interested. This will help give you ideals and prevent being completely lost when you arrive and do not know what to do.Second, you need to make a budget. If you plan ahead, you can save on ticket prices. Then pack your luggage . You should think about what clothes are suitable, any medications are necessary, and the currency. Moreover, traveling with lots of luggage restricts your movement and cause discomfort. Only pack the necessaries.Finally, put vacation notices on your mail, and remember to set your answering machine. With all your steps completed, it's time for you to enjoy the trip.
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標題多打一個do喔
回覆刪除research有點偏向是報告或是某種調查
建議改成google online
keep in mind像是要把某事記在心中
可以用 mind 或 consider
第五行interested要加in喔
This will help give you ideals and prevent being completely lost when you arrive and do not know what to do.
不用help 這樣就雙動辭了
而且有中文寫法的味道..
然後prevent後可以+from getting lose
finally那一段寫的不錯
感覺有認真想過整個旅行的流程
很細心注意細節:)
我喜歡:D
整個過程還蠻詳細的
回覆刪除可是前面已經寫了幾個步驟了
那第七行的Second,是?
How To Plan A Trip 就好了喔!!!
回覆刪除Planning a trip can be easy.
開頭有點短~可以加上先計畫的好處...
Then, you need to (search for) weather (information) and climatic conditions
是不是要加定飯店啊!不然會沒地方住~
十分詳細喔=)
After that you can make a list. Write down the places you want to visit, including restaurants, museums, malls, and other places where you are interested.
回覆刪除這兩句可以合併成After that, you can make a list, writing down the places you want to visit, including restaurants, museums, malls, and other places where you are interested.
ideals是ideas吧
內容好詳盡唷但開頭如果再長一點看起來會更漂亮
Only pack the necessaries.
回覆刪除→You can only pack the necessaries you want.
感覺比較完整~
整體感覺還蠻詳盡的~
可以加點例子阿~
結尾很棒喔~
開頭的部分我覺得可以再描述的更完整一點喔~可以加個說明簡單的大綱說明為甚麼你這麼覺得
回覆刪除中間內容的部分我覺得寫的很詳細喔,有很清楚說明如果你要出門前確實應該要如何準備
最後的倒數第二句我覺得你想的真是週到阿^^還會記得要先設起來放
一開始在加點敘述吧:)
回覆刪除第五行 This will help give you ideals and prevent being completely lost when you arrive and do not know what to do.
這句有2個動詞欸 還有prevent的用法怪怪的喔
倒數第六行 second要改其他的連接詞喔ex:furthermore
If you plan ahead是"事先計畫"嗎 如果是我不知道可不可以用ahead 或許可以改成 in advance
any medications are necessary
→any medication is necessary